How does my story sound so far?
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Not bad at all. Footsteps don’t ‘emerge’, though.
(CLAP, CLAP, CLAP) oh wow i loved it, i am out of words, are you PUBLISHED ? give me more i will buy it if you want.
seriously this is the first time i have answered a question about what do you think of my story that i have actually not one critique, you must be doing this for years now. you are really talented and i am out of words to describe just how much.
your story kept me reading fast because i wanted to know what happened next, even before i was done with the line i was reading i dont know if you can understand this.
i am not a person who reads storys that are scary but this one so so grea!!!
i am also a writer and there are so many diferent kinds of writer because my stories in no way relate to yours but yours is so good in a way that i could never imagine myself writing it.
you are really talented and i could be so critical like i said but this is too good for words but if i knew better words i would say…..well i dont know any so ill just give you ***** !!!!