Please rate the beginning of a story I’m writing?
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You are very talented at descriptive writing. Why did you change locations without telling us why you were in the Library?
i like it, i might add more deatails, and more "filler" sentances. but otherwise it is interesting
its decent but the description could be a little different, ur slightly vague and need more of like this:
My long, dark, curly hair hangs just at the right length below me. My physical description isn’t that peculiar, just a "normal" human teenager… if there is such a thing.
I am personally a writer so please do not mock my interpretation.